Prompt: Writing is a process, and the first draft is rarely perfect. Strong writers improve their work through revision. After reviewing and revising your literary argument paragraph, what changes did you make to strengthen your writing?

 Prompt Response: I first started by editing my quotes to make sure my context for the quotes were included so they made sense. Next I revised my main claim at the beginning of the body paragraph to make it more concise. The most mental effort I put into editing was changing commentary from more claims to elaborating. My commentary wasn't commentating anything it was summarizing what the reader already knows from the book. Once I sat back and found a way to articulate myself in a manner that elaborated on my quotes I believe my paragraph came together nicely. 


Summary: In class we took time to edit our body paragraphs and ask questions about what we need to revise in our body paragraphs. 


Reflection: It was humbling to see 25/50 for points. Though it was good for me. It made me realize my writing had gotten rusty and I needed a kick start to really get those gears moving again. I'm happy for this opportunity to improve once more. 

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